Jasmine Hart

Ooooh this is hard. Favoruites? In no particular order; The Harry Potter series (so excited for Saturday!Yay!!!) The Sisterhood of The Travelling Pants series by Ann Brashares "Feeling Sorry For ...

Very good. I'd add a comma after "you" in line four. Other than that, I really can't find any serious faults with this. It was beautiful and well developed, and ...

Ok, let's see...firstly I'd scrap "This Is 333 Words Long." It makes it sound too mechanical, and is unneccesary. The rhyming couplets were brave, but I'm not sure they're right ...

Wow, I love was really beautiful, and I loved the last stanza, the contrasts there were amazing.Your imagery was fresh and interesting. I wish I could say something more constructive, ...

Your imagery is very good, and I particularily liked "waxen wings". I'm not sure about the first line, as I think "passionately" contrasts a little awkwardly with "atoms". It makes ...

Lovely. This put me in a good mood :D You'd make a great motivational speaker!This was really beautiful.

I'm impressed! This was vivid and honest. A couple of minor grammar/phrasing points, which I can point out if you like, but this was very skillfully written for your age. ...

Brilliant.I loved it. It was really descriptive, and, as always, beautifully written. I'm useless at this kind of piece, so I'm completely awe-struck. Well done!

I have allowed myself to be tainted By vampire kisses which have seized my soul Leaving me with the undead acquainted, Where distance could do nothing to console. But still ...

This was great, I really loved it. I'd capitalise the first letter of each stanza, but I think this is a personal preference.Your imagery is excellent. However, I think that ...

I hate to point it out, but "peronality" is a typo. I don't think "him" really needs to be in italics.Other than that, I'm not sure what I can say, ...

I like it, especially stanzas one and three. I like the way it peters out in the last stanza, but overall I think that the conclusion could be more powerful. ...

Lol. Forgot about this. Ya Kit, it was a few years ago. Fine, I'll give it another shot, but somehow I can't see my mind changing (it usually doesn't!). Don't ...

I liked it, especially the ending.I don't like "Good, no one heard." I think this is a little too colloquial, and is a bit out of synch with the overall ...

Generally, I handwrite my stuff. The poems and the short stories are always handwritten, and I only type them up if I'm posting them, or sending them somewhere.I draft them ...